Examples of Feedback

Here are some examples of tutors' comments on their students' writing. Click on the links below for advice to make the most of this feedback.

• Your writing needs to be more academic.

• More analysis of this point is necessary.

• You need to present an argument.

• You need to use more academic caution / You need to use hedging/ This claim is too strong.

• Could you clarify this point?

• Your conclusion needs improvement.

• Questions about the content e.g. Which school? Why not? Is this the primary role of this staff member? Who is this?

• You need to be more critical.

• You need to define these terms / you need a definition here.

• You need to develop this point more. / This needs more development.

• This needs more explanation.

• I need a clear introduction telling me where you are going.

• This essay needs more organisation.

• Your paragraphs need more work.

• I cannot see evidence of your reading

• This needs a reference.

• Is this relevant?

• This essay lacks structure.

• You have not addressed the title.

• I don't follow what you mean here, can you say a bit more?/ I'm not sure I understand this.